One of my bandmates said they wanted something upbeat and dissonant; this was my best shot at it. As you can probably tell, it's heavily influenced by At The Drive-In.
Very ATD-I. Maybe even too much like ATD-I. My only real complaint is that it's really repetetive. I mean. It was enjoyable, but you really just repeated the same two riffs (which, in themselves, sound very similar to each other) with tiny variations throughout the whole song. Change the lead riff in the bridge; make it something different than the riff I've already heard five times. Change the second verse lead to be even slightly different from the first. I'd really like to see some structural changes too, but mostly I'd like to see a different chord progression somewhere.

Overall, it was pretty good, but I think you could do a lot more with it.

I just want to sleep forever.