#1
I'm running in this cycle
I'm running over and over
I cant break free

Forever I am still here
staring into the past
staring into what hasn't happened yet

If I forever exist here
I will never see a light
to guide me in a direction
fitting for ones life

All we know has ceased
to become something new
all we know is fake

all the worlds treasures
have surfaced from the sea
the sea has given all it has

if we forever exist here
we never see a light
that guides us away from disaster
all us million fishes

all us million fishes
we stare at our bowls and
look for an escape route

but we see circles
all it is is these circles
the mighty magician of time

If he forever exists here
he will block out the light
never let us go in a direction
fitting for our existance
MCR FAN 405


originally posted by diveright
for one does not simply walk in to a spinning propeller


Originally posted by BLToast
Buckethead is the meaning of awesome
#2
I'm running in this cycle
I'm running over and over
I cant break free
Forever I am still here
staring into the past
staring into what hasn't happened yet

If I forever exist here
I will never see a light
to guide me in a direction
fitting for ones life

All we know has ceased
to become something new
all we know is fake Maybe a different word then fake. Maybe artificial.
all the worlds treasures
have surfaced from the sea
the sea has given all it has

if we forever exist here
we never see a light
that guides us away from disaster
all us million fishes There could a better word then fishes.

all us million fishes
we stare at our bowls and
look for an escape route

but we see circles
all it is is these circles
the mighty magician of time

If he forever exists here
he will block out the light
never let us go in a direction
fitting for our existance


Some of it is redundant in my opinion.



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Last edited by Blackwaterson89 at Aug 22, 2010,
#3
thanks!
MCR FAN 405


originally posted by diveright
for one does not simply walk in to a spinning propeller


Originally posted by BLToast
Buckethead is the meaning of awesome
#4
i felt it was ok some of your words like 'forever' is repeated again and its not that good to repeat the same words twice plus agree with blackwaterson's points but i liked verse1 alot so not too bad but needs some changes. keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.
#5
thats meant to be like a chorus modified to fit the verse that comes before it but much appreciated!
MCR FAN 405


originally posted by diveright
for one does not simply walk in to a spinning propeller


Originally posted by BLToast
Buckethead is the meaning of awesome