#1
So I'm working on this part to a song I'm writing, I've got these sweeps in it.
But for some reason, the beginning of the fourth measure, just seems off to me, I can't place what it should be.
Maybe you guys will hear it too.
Any help would be great, thanks.
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sweeps..gp5
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#2
The F, A and C notes should be natural for it to be consonant and to keep that seventh chord arpeggio sound you're most likely going for. You have a tritone and augmented arpeggios in there now. It's got a cool sound though.

I fixed it for you in case what I said sounds like Hebrew to you:
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fixed_sweeps.gp5
Last edited by Sóknardalr at Aug 21, 2010,
#4
Quote by Life Is Brutal
WRONG!

This is much better, although its still too slow.


Because one more repeat was absolutely necessary.
#5
Quote by Life Is Brutal
WRONG!

This is much better, although its still too slow.

320 BPM?

16th Notes suffice, :|
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#6
thanks, that sounds a lot better.
Will you explain to me what I did wrong exactly?
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#7
Quote by AustinxAtomic
thanks, that sounds a lot better.
Will you explain to me what I did wrong exactly?

The "13" and the "11" notes were one too high. That's pretty much it. They were out of tune with one another.
There will be zero tolerance
For the creator of hallowed intentions
There will be zero tolerance
Fate is your deciding God