#1
I wrote this song about a camp I go to that I never want to leave. I guess it could be about really anyplace you want it to be.


Our Last Night

Verse 1:
The memories we’ve made
The friends we’ll take
Back to our home again
Our time comes to an end
There’s no place I’d rather be
Than the place where we
Have had the time of our lives
I’m hoping the dream survives

Chorus:
Our last night beneath the stars
You know we’ll never be far
Away from each other
On our last night beneath the stars

Verse 2:
I don’t ever want to leave
It makes it hard to breathe
Knowing where I’ve been
Wondering if I’ll return again

Chorus:
Our last night beneath the stars
You know we’ll never be far
Away from each other
On our last night beneath the stars

Outro:
Knowing I can be myself
Provides all my help
No need to hide who I am
Makes me feel at home again


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#2
Honestly as a poem I don't think it's working. Maybe you could add punctuation so I can see where you want the sentences to end. It can work as a song though 'cause you can shape the way you sing.

Lyrically it's not bad. It's something personal, I get that. I'd say you're not a very frequent writer because it's really simple. But it does convey your point extremely well and as far as I'm concerned that's what really matters.

Just my opinion though so others may disagree and you can disregard it if you wish.
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