#1
I think this might be a bit shaky but it sounds okay with music

Sometimes I feel alone at night
Sometimes everything is not right
Sometimes it's hard to see the light
When the darkness's blocking your sight

So I'll wait until the morning comes
And hopefully I'll be there with someone
To share the memories of yesterday (of yesterday)
And I know one look into your eyes will make everything okay.
And everything will be okay.

Today I, have found the love of my life
And today I, want to let the world know she's mine
And today I, am longing for you to come home so we can be
Everlasting happiness, it doesn't get better than this
Frever, is that long enough for you to believe
And it's true, that I do love you.
#2
This is good piece, I dont think I can add anything to it.


Edit: I don't mean to be dickhead, but I think the rule is two post every 5 days.
"Music became a healer for me. And I learned to listen with all my being. I found that it could wipe away all the emotions of fear and confusion relating to my family." Eric Clapton
#4
It is cool man, just be sure to read all the rules of each forum you post in. They are usually the announcements at the top of the page. Also be sure to comment on other people's work.
"Music became a healer for me. And I learned to listen with all my being. I found that it could wipe away all the emotions of fear and confusion relating to my family." Eric Clapton
Last edited by Blackwaterson89 at Aug 22, 2010,
#5
ok i like this!! and i've actually written a song which is similar to your verse1 where the word 'sometimes' is repeating in evey line. the last line is good but it doesnt kinda fit but i guess it sounds better with the music than readiing it. overall its really good!! keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.