#1
When God gave out eyes so we could see, He missed me out.
When God gave out arms so we could reach, He missed me out.
When God gave out hands so we could touch, He missed me out.
When God gave out legs so we could walk, He missed me out.
When God handed out hearts so we could love, He missed me out.
When God gave us brains so we could think, He missed me out.
When God made the stars so we could dream, He missed me out.
When God made the Earth so we'd have a home, He missed me out.
When God made Eve for company, He missed me out.
When God designed us so we could be, He missed me out.
#3
Really this almost sounds like a christian emo song. I don't care for the repeatativeness of it, but I'm sure with some music and a good rhythm it'll sound great Keep on Writing
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#4
its really good!! i like this alot and i agree there should be a chorus if not a verse. greatjob
Roses are red
Violets are blue
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#5
Although I can't really relate to the subject matter much myself, I think the repetition is put to very good use in this case. I like it. Good job