#1
Here it goes...

It’s funny as a fit
when it all turns to sh!t,
You may as well die
‘cause you cannot provide,

Water and tea,
It all comes to me,
We become so high
it’s like suicide,

The same old sh!t,
I’m over it,
You bore me with
the same old s!it,

The same old sh!t,
F*uckin’ hypocrite,
Stop telling me
the same old sh!t,

Drink your wine and apple stew,
It’s poisoned, oh f*ck, I thought you knew,
I’m laughing at you as you did to me
when I threw up on your family

Photos of you and your dad,
Mummy and sister out on the sand
at the beach of washed up dreams,
Nothing more, nothing less, all but history,

The same old sh!t,
I’m over it,
You bore me with
the same old sh!t,

The same old sh!t,
F*ckin’ hypocrite,
Stop telling me
the same old sh!t,

Hope and trust, broken hearts
falling apart on the inside,
Tears and cries, say goodbye
did my best to try and survive,

The same old sh!t inside my head,
The same old sh!t inside my veins,
The same old sh!t, the words you’ve said,
The same old sh!t is what you’ve prepared,

The same old sh!t,
I’m over it,
You bore me with
the same old sh!t,

The same old sh!t,
F*ckin’ hypocrite,
Stop telling me
the same old sh!t…

Thanks for reading,
C4C?

Cheers,
TheAscendant
#2
its really good!! i think the pre-chorus and the chorus are almost the same so change them a bit the rest is awesome! the last verse was my fav, keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.
#4
Quote by Guitarbaddie
Never heard of apple stew.

I got tired of reading "sh!t" all the time, but it might fit music behind it

Not my style, but I think it could fit a song nicely.


Hae man,
The meaning behind this is that I got sick of getting told the same ol' sh!t all
the time and never did something good enough which has made me write a
song about it.

I guess there is quite a bit of swearing and stuff but it's a song that i can just scream
at and just lose myself in. Something that isnt all covered up like most of the sh!t that
we have to hear on the radio nowadays.

Its punk inspired especially nirvana because of the strange words like apple stew and how each verse sorta links into each other. So thanks for the review and will get on to critiqing one of your songs soon.

Cheers,
TheAscendant
#5
Quote by leafwhisperer
its really good!! i think the pre-chorus and the chorus are almost the same so change them a bit the rest is awesome! the last verse was my fav, keep on writing


Hae man,
Thanks for the comment, the two verses that re-occur are the two chorus,
not like a pre-chorus thing, just like a long chorus, just the way i wrote them.

I like to write in a way that people will remember certain areas of the verses
and choruses so the reason why the words for the chorus sound the same is to make 'em remember.

Will get on to critiqing your works soon!

Cheers,
TheAscendant
#6
Quote by TheAscendant
Hae man,
The meaning behind this is that I got sick of getting told the same ol' sh!t all
the time and never did something good enough which has made me write a
song about it.

I guess there is quite a bit of swearing and stuff but it's a song that i can just scream
at and just lose myself in. Something that isnt all covered up like most of the sh!t that
we have to hear on the radio nowadays.

Its punk inspired especially nirvana because of the strange words like apple stew and how each verse sorta links into each other. So thanks for the review and will get on to critiqing one of your songs soon.

Cheers,
TheAscendant


I don't mind if you swear, but I don't see how this could differ from music on the radio...
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#7
The same old sh!t is a phrase: I don't know and I don't care. My dad has always said that phrase.
I get sick of him saying "the same old sh!t". It's also the same old sh!t caus its full of sh!t.
He does care. He just doesn't wanna show it. After getting told that so many times it gets into my head and my body ie veins.

A poisoned stew makes you sick right? The words he says are the poison and im the stew.
Dad says to me wtf son, then im like its poisoned, i thought you knew...

If you don't understand don't worry....

Cheers,
TheAscendant
#8
Quote by TheAscendant
Hae man,
Thanks for the comment, the two verses that re-occur are the two chorus,
not like a pre-chorus thing, just like a long chorus, just the way i wrote them.

I like to write in a way that people will remember certain areas of the verses
and choruses so the reason why the words for the chorus sound the same is to make 'em remember.

Will get on to critiqing your works soon!

Cheers,
TheAscendant


my bad a long chorus does make more sense.
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.