#2
loved it when i dl'd from the competition thread. loved it now. that is all.
Gear
-Ibanez RG321 ( /w D-Sonic)
-Agile AL-3100 (/w Custom + '59)
-Yamaha FG730S
-Crybaby 535Q
-Keeley TS-9
-ISP Decimator
-B-52 AT-212
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#3
I think you just need to expand your ideas. The breakdown isn't a 'breakdown' in my opinion, it may fit the description of breakdown, but breakdowns in this genre are generally heavier than the rest of the song. When the lead comes in it's almost haunting, which is epic. Outro was good too. I think the chorus didnt feel very chorus'y just another verse. It seems like you're attached to the chorus chords, and I like them but they need less use. Umm lots of good ideas here, I often find that if I go back and play it gets even better.
#5
songwriting and the build up are really nice !

and the last parts at the end are amazing !