#1
Hey guys,

I wrote a song about 6 months ago, and it was my first song.

Since then, I've improved the song structure, and a few other things, and now have written vocals for it.

Just looking for some feedback on the song.

Also, what genre would people say it is?

Thanks.
Attachments:
All Our Hopes.zip
Last edited by guitar ben94 at Aug 29, 2010,
#2
Genre? Just stick with rock. Not much else going on really aside from that

As for the piece. Well, firstly I'm not entirely sure about the vocals two regards, firstly, the speed at which you deliver the words. Its a tad over whelming, but I could certainly learn to like them on the other hand. secondly, I'm not convinced you should end the vocal in the middle of words. It works in some places.. but in others it leaves a kind of unfinished vibe hanging around.

Next. at 48, I think 4 bars of those kind of drums before you break into the roll is a bit much. Not entirely sure what you could do to change that and keep the build up. maybe it has something to do with the cymbal hits, not sure.

"chorus 3" is a lovely change in pace.

and the end is pretty solid too


I have a couple of pieces in my sig with Centauri being the newest. Crit whatever you wish mmkay!
#3
Thanks for the crit.

And:
Quote by Of_Wolves
secondly, I'm not convinced you should end the vocal in the middle of words. It works in some places.. but in others it leaves a kind of unfinished vibe hanging around.

I think it's just the program tbh.