#1
Just wondering what you guys would think of these, going to record these songs soon and I don't want them to contain any bad grammar or other itchy things (I'm not a native english speaker). Be aware that my lyrics are usually quite metaphorical .

Wearing down the words to
a sentimental state
block the doors and tell the guards to wait

Floating out the chimney
You burn the past away
Laying out your hopes and dreams today

...

Forcing out the violent steel
Yet feeding on the fire
Every step is one we need to wire

So wipe the storm a way and
give yourself a break
Feeling more with every breath you take

...

Do you remember me?
It's been quite some time
Waiting for the flood
We were next in line
Everything was lost
Running through the storm
I think the weather's good
For a change of course

...

Good weather
For a change of course



No more walls to keep me safe
No more hiding tears
No more fear for darker days
There's no light in here

No more love to ease the day
It just fuels my fear
Just one who lives in his own way
Please bring a light in here


I'll open up my heart and head
It's all I've left to give
Down with the walls I built around myself
No more losing


To share your world with all but one
One chose to disappear
Wake me when the race is run
Or start a fire in here


I'll open up my heart and head
It's all I've left to give
Down with the walls I built around myself
No more losing

...

A fire
A fire
Your hands should burn

...

I'll open up my heart and head
It's all I've left to give
Down with the walls I built around myself
No more losing



The final steps you take
When all the wheels are turning against you
You're teaching me how to fall
With open arms I embrace the earth

Hopelessly trying to crawl
Back into the wounds you're trying to salve
Feeling the ground as I move
Like a newborn, again


Don't let go of your fears
They will save you soon
Don't hide the world from your tears
Keep your hands off the moon


Watching the sun fall down
When I'm trying so hard to keep up to the rays
Using the shards to remove
The summer nights you loved


Don't let go of your fears
They will save you soon
Don't hide the world from your tears
Keep your hands off the moon

...

If you could rain down
All your love on us
We'd still believe in
Your search for trust
You who build these altars now

To sacrifice these children
You must not do it anymore
#2
I think you can only post one at a time. Though just by loosly reading them, they do sound very good. When you post on proper I will give my word of critique.
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