#1
This poem is pretty vague, and it doesn't give an answer to the question in the title, but I'm stuck with it, so I just post what I have so you can see where I'm going


Why babies cry

As a baby I still mourn
the day that I was born
no memory is haunting me from back then
but my heart remembers the hour
and wets my eyes with a sadness in them
and my tongue tastes my tears.
And the salt has become sour
and the odor I smell is of fear.
#2
Nice concept I would like to see a full version but "and" is used too many times...

Quote by Karel Juwet
no memory is haunting me from back then
but my heart remembers the hour
and wets my eyes with a sadness in them
and my tongue tastes my tears.
And the salt has become sour
and the odor I smell is of fear.


I would propose this to make it flow better...

Memories dont hunt me from back then
but my heart remembers the hour
and wets my eyes with a sadness
while my tongue tastes my tears
the salt has become sour
and the odor i smell is of fear

Its just rearranging but i think this sounds better however take it or leave it, its your choice.Keep writing!