#1
Ok so id really like some feedback or ways i could improve this song before i show it to my band, i've been in a rut lately with lyrics :/ heres the key:

Sung
Screamed
Spoken

I was broken beyond manly cure
grinding away with a bitter yurn
sour with hate, because of him
he sent her into my life again

so i looked towards you with awe
cause im the hero with a tragic flaw
and you said why are you masked
so i fell to my knees and asked

oh please open me wide
and fill me with you
move everything aside
and make me like you
oh let me burn like
you lite me with gasoline
then dowse me with
your water of purity


you picked me up when i was down
but still i trembled at the sound
of you voice as it surrounded me
and let me go but i wasnt free

i holded on to the chains of them
so i was still condemded
you gave me the will i needed
and for theres lifes a pleaded

please open me wide
and fill me with you
move everything aside
and make me like you
oh let me burn like
you lite me with gasoline
then dowse me with
your water of purity


come take me away
please take me away
come take me away

please take me away
will you forgive
please forgive me
will you forgive

please forgive me

oh please open me wide
and fill me with you
move everything aside
and make me like you
oh let me burn like
you lite me with gasoline
then dowse me with
your water of purity