#1
Another punk song written by yours truly.

[Intro Chords 2x]

Verse 1
Everything is fucked up all around
I feel myself sinking to the ground
Things are always left, yet never right
I guess it's the story of my fucking life!

Chorus
Why Should I Bother?(2x)

Verse 2
I bit my lip, I hid my grief
I forced back the tears, I grit my teeth
I'm loosing my mind and I'm cracking
Talking to myself and asking!

Chorus:
Why Should I Bother(4x)

[Bridge 2x]

[solo!]

Chorus (4x)


That's it! Feedback will be greatly appreciated. Thanks! Will comment for comment, just leave the link to your song.
Last edited by Kenneth19 at Sep 9, 2010,
#2
Quote by Kenneth19
Another punk song written by yours truly.

[Intro Chords 2x]

Verse 1
Everything is fucked up all around
The economy is sinking in the ground
Things are always left, yet never right
I guess it's the story of my fucking life!
i think this is good but i think you should put my life instead of the economy, cause i mean what kind of punk song is about the economy right?haha

Chorus
Why Should I Bother?(2x)

more!
Verse 2
I bit my lip, I hid my grief
I forced back the tears, I grit my teeth
I'm loosing my mind and I'm cracking
Talking to myself and asking!
i like this stanza especially
Chorus:
Why Should I Bother(4x)

[Bridge 2x]

[solo!]

Chorus (4x)


That's it! Feedback will be greatly appreciated. Thanks!



make the chorus longer, i think for your next song you should write a song that people can relate to rather than just statements. i take it the bridge is instrumental? other wise good, very clear what the message is and i like that
C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1358462
Last edited by timfoley at Sep 5, 2010,
#3
Yea, the bridge is instrumental at the moment...Hell yea, the original copy I wrote here said "I feel myself sinking to the ground" I just wanted to give it a try on here. lol. Thanks man, will do.