#1
in your strange
there's a fretting glance
a desire to dance
in your strange
where you've forgot my name
inked on the serviette
I put in your pocket
a desire to dance
goes thud on the floor
in your strange
your parallel world
where the chorus adores you
a desire to dance
in your strange
(your strange)
you'd better beware
in your strange
(your strange)
there's so little air
in your strange
(your strange)
no fooling us there
in your strange
(your strange)
a desire to dance
goes thud on the floor
Last edited by Jammydude44 at Sep 6, 2010,
#2
at first, i liked it, when reading up to parenthetical line, and i was rather interested, as generally, 'places' are not possessed and an adjective. however, after that, i feel that this became very repetitious and didn't say much more after that. i also think the ending was weak.

i still like this, though.
#4
I think it's a neat idea, using strange as a noun and saying "your strange".
Certainly interesting, but I'm not so crazy about this. It just didn't flow so smooth, and I had trouble getting into it.