#1
i'm drunk and im not quite sure what it is you want from me
is it that humanistic scream?
is it that howl which resonates so freely from our lungs
uninhibited by whether or not we give a fuck
what is it that motivates you towards these words
pouring so freely from the verses that ive already heard
amalgamations of every experience i have ever learned
breathed off the lips of strangers and lovers alike
found in the eyes of every insect and flower and fucker
and pusher and shover and kisser and
every universal thing that i will ever see
that i will ever breathe

where did you learn to breathe?
what inside those cells did you learn to perceive?
what did you decide was above the human mind and
what did you decide was only in the trees?
did you fill you lungs wiht mlountain air and
puff out cigarettes?
did you fall from lips and tongue and sweat
and wonder what we've thought of yet
that hasnt been mmanipulated
by some subtle mundane threat?>
did you ask yourself what made you feel
what made you think
what made you laugh
what made you stop
and shut up for a goddamn second
and wonder why we are so small
in a child that is so big
Quote by Arthur Curry
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#2
i can't tell if you were really drunk when you wrote this. usually the stuff i write while i'm drunk is a disgrace to the english language. but this was really great. it had a ferocity to it and you really nailed that tone.
here, My Dear, here it is
#3
So raw it's unsettling. I'm uncomfortable in my skin after reading that. This might be one of my favorites from you.
Today I feel electric grey
I hope tomorrow, neon black
#4
thanks guys, that's nice of you, but i really hate this once reading it kind of sober. i wish it wasnt as phony as it is. oh swellz.
Quote by Arthur Curry
it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




e-married to
theguitarist
minterman22
tateandlyle
& alaskan_ninja

#5
I'm tired of the drunk writer stereotype. We need something new.

As for the piece, this seems more like something that belongs in the freepost thread. It feels unedited, dashed off. Some of the anger in it, especially in the last few lines, seemed forced; a child raging uselessly against the constraints of its parents.