#1
last (but certainly not least imo ) of the three works that are up for recording. Don't take things too literally, I don't have any intentions to burn anyone .

Verse
No more walls to keep me safe
No more hiding tears
No more fear for darker days
There's no light in here

No more love to ease the day
It just fuels my fear
Just one who lives in his own way
Please bring a light in here

Chorus
I'll open up my heart and head
It's all I've left to give
Down with the walls I built around myself
No more losing

Verse
To share your world with all but one
One chose to disappear
Wake me when the race is run
Or start a fire in here

Chorus
I'll open up my heart and head
It's all I've left to give
Down with the walls I built around myself
No more losing

...

Bridge
A fire
A fire
Your hands should burn

...

Chorus
I'll open up my heart and head
It's all I've left to give
Down with the walls I built around myself
No more losing


Most straightforward lyrics I've ever wrote, though they where straight from the heart at the time so I guess it's justified . I'll c4c ofcourse.
You who build these altars now

To sacrifice these children
You must not do it anymore
Last edited by the bartender at Sep 6, 2010,
#2
Wow!So i just post on your other song and ask you to write something straight forward n its already here!!
For me this would be one of the best i've read here till nowNo crit except maybe change the lines in the chorus to
"I'll tear up my heart n head
It's all i've left with me
shatter the walls i built around myself
There will be no more losing"
Even if you dont doesnt really matter i love it
Keep writing!

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1349003
Last edited by BloodCold at Sep 6, 2010,