JoeRyerAOI
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2007
58 IQ
#1
I wrote this ages ago and loved it, but as hard as i tried (and oh god did i try!) i could never think if where to go next with it!

If you've got any ideas id love some help

but if not, please enjoy what could have been a great song :P
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super melodic.zip
shanchett99
^is my name -> is my game
Join date: Sep 2008
78 IQ
#2
writing as i listen.

good synth intro, i like how you didnt make it the lead melody and let the guitar take that part.
drums were right on spot(i say this alot in my critique's because its a really important part)
you should REALLY work on making this into a full song.
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JoeRyerAOI
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2007
58 IQ
#3
Haha thanks man i know its been over a year since i wrote this!

the drums are generally fairly decent as i am a drummer myself as well as a guitarist!

Thanks for the crit man, i liked "shadows of the mind" on your profile! it would be great to see some full tabs from you
shanchett99
^is my name -> is my game
Join date: Sep 2008
78 IQ
#4
thanks, but "SotM" was more of a test on a few things.
uploading to UG,modes,and the movable chord i used.
I'm more of an improv man , i just can't play then sit down and write it xD
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vIsIbleNoIsE
The Asian-Viking Paradox
Join date: Feb 2006
1,540 IQ
#5
6-7-1-2 progression afterward? (those would be chord root tones)

actually i don't know if that's proper notation at all so the basic progression in tab would be, on the fifth string: ---3--5--7--9--

keeping the same rhythm that you have. then afterward i'd put some sort of key change into a heavier section. that's what came to my mind.

pretty cool beginning, anyhow!
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