#1
Litte brown shoes has slashed my hands
Lttle brown shoes has killed a man
little brown shoes so fragile and thin
she blew into town on indian wind


why won't you burn me
why don't you hurt me
little brown shoes will steal away
little brown shoes will sing today



Little brown shoes orange peppers in her hair
been 18 years since they burned me there
with eyes like fire and a searchlight moon
yes we are but devils too


why won't you burn me
why don't you hurt me
little brown shoes will steal away
little brown shoes will sing today
#3
Nice piece...but it's to short and more imagination is needed!Also the last two lines of verse 2 didnt flow well so do something about 'em.My suggestion...
"With eyes burning gold beneath the searching moon
so far we were angles but soon devils did bloom"
Keep writing!