#4
I think a more interesting rhythm guitar would really help and perhaps start a new variation of the same thing everytime the phrase repeats.
#6
Its a good progression to base a song around of I think, but you'll need another guitar part over top of that, and may be build up to the drums coming in. If anything its a good intro or chorus.

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#7
Play it on time for starters. That's my first and probably best suggestion.
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#8
Quote by Brendan.Clace
Play it on time for starters. That's my first and probably best suggestion.

sorry about not being i recorded it with a toneport gx it has terrible latency lol