#1
And a question...

kay, this started as two seperate songs, but i think it -might- work as one?


Pt 1.
Knees hit the floor,
drink spills on your jeans
you're wrecked again,
too ****ed up to care

Whats the excuse this time?
Did you do it foor a dare?
Dyou think he's gonna care
when you wake up crying at mine?

We'll pick you up again,
knowing you'll regret it,
'cause in the end, who was he?
Just some guy with a catching grin

Pt 2.
I can't believe we stayed for this,
that other band were good as it gets,
the hall's getting empty again,
and for a minute it's just us

Now i've heard of intimacy,
but this show was a sell-out,
bodies pressed together despite the space,
all of a sudden the hair gets scarce
[but he's gone]


My band's got a guy singer and a girl singer, so i might split the vocal? any ideas on merging them? or would they be better seperate?


Taaaa

xx
My Band (As Faith Fades)


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#2
For a start, try type it out properly.
And try make it more catchy?
It doesn't seem to flow in my head.
#3
Quote by Fieryhead
For a start, try type it out properly.
And try make it more catchy?
It doesn't seem to flow in my head.


'm not sure what you mean by type it out properly?

keep in mind it started as two different songs, hence pt 1 and pt 2, i'm just wondering if they wuld work in the same context?

xx
My Band (As Faith Fades)


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#4
I don't think they would work as they seem to be about different things, best keep them seperate. And as seperate songs they need to be abit more catchy, also they are very short, could do with a chorus piece or one verse longer or something
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#5
Quote by freighttrain
I don't think they would work as they seem to be about different things, best keep them seperate. And as seperate songs they need to be abit more catchy, also they are very short, could do with a chorus piece or one verse longer or something



yehhh, they're both pretty rough, ta for the input though
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