#1
C4C

Do you remember when we were kids
Spin the bottle back in 96
I betcha never knew that you were my first
Kiss me softly and kiss me slowly
Come in closer you wont be sorry
You and I together forever in

Love, love, love
We were oh so young
And livin it up
Love love love

Do you remember back in the day
When all the boys thought the girls were lame
I betcha never knew I had my eye on
You and I, saw it coming
We knew back than we were on to something
But back than we didnt call it

Love, love, love
We were oh so young
And livin it up
Love love love

Fast forward to present day
When I, touch your lips I still feel the same as I did
Back in 96
Fast forward to present day
As we pack our things and we move away with it
We are so in

Love, love, love
We were oh so young
And livin it up
Love love love

Do you remember when we were kids?
Spin the bottle back in nineteen-ninety-six....
#2
I actually REALLY like this! Bravo!
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#4
Although I'm usually opposed to love songs you did a good job with these lyrics. I'm interested to hear the rhythm, I imagine it being an upbeat pop kind of song. Like cinderwolf said, make a recording!

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#5
I enjoyed reading this piece. I'm a sucker for love songs, especially good ones. I thought this had a a very flow to it, but I also think that punctuation would help it out. I just had a few problems, I didn't really care for the last three lines of the first verse. I think it has to do with the tense change. Your talking about the past and then you switch to present tense. Also I wasn't feeling the last verse. I just think you should describe how the present day relationship is in more detail. Like where you guys are, what you guys do, etc. Anyways, nice job, man.

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#6
I really like this. The simplicity and juvenile-ness of it give a somewhat innocent feel, while the addition of more mature ideas keeps it from being childish and boring. It is great. I'm not a huge fan of the chorus, but it is hard to judge without rhythm along with it. post a recording

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