#1
All I wanted to be was the light in your life.
And you took it away, took it away
Like always.
Every good thing that ever comes my way
Ends up being some awkward situation I don’t know how to explain
And now I’m back to square one
Again and again.

When you’re ready to believe
Call me
Don’t be deceived
By what you think you can see
Cuz I, can still be
What you need.

All I ever wanted a sense of purpose
Or a feeling of belonging.
But not today
Every time I feel let down
You push and shove until what goes around comes around
And now I’m back to square one
Again and again.

When you’re ready to believe
Call me.
Don’t be deceived
By what you thought you could see
Cuz I can still be
What you need

Seems that I, have maybe found, the lights and sounds
That bring me back home
Why do I, accept your lies
Sometimes I feel better off alone.

Really cliche love song, haven't wrote in a while. Feedback please
#2
I think is pretty good to be honest. Sure its cliche, but I think it works well as a song. Not really feeling the second verse. I think the second verse could be the part where you explain things in a little more detail and make the piece less cliche. I also was too into the chorus. It just seemed kind of bland. The closing part was very good however. I could sense a lot of emotion from it. Anyways, I hope to read more from you.

Crit mine please
Homesick
#3
Thanks, I agree the second verse could use some work. Still not sure what I'm gonna do with the chorus. And I'll definitely check out your piece!