#1
Its been a while since i posted lyrics...
lyrics for my Prog-Metal group. one of our songs.
Good? bad? tell me what you think


Tear


VERSE
How, could it be?
Am I wrong to say I won?
Whats, the price?
That you paid to bear the weight
Of the whole world into
One, Minor flaw
I guess you missed the sign
blood, black and white
How could you fail to see,
you stepped all over
the lines laid out in life

Bridge
Such a waist of time
such a helpless mind

Chorus
Tear me open
pull out, the
life un-broken

Tear me open
pull out, the
life un-broken

VERSE
So how does it feel?
to delay a future life
admiting victory is
the only way to die
speak the truth for me
come down from your highs
believe when you reach the ground
there will be no-where left to hide

Bridge
such a waist of time
such a helpless mind
such a waist of time
such a waist of my whole life

Chorus
Tear me open
pull out, the
Life un-broken

Tear me open
pull out, the
Life unbroken

(quotes spoken underneath instumental part)

“When nobody will look at you, you can stare a hole in them.
Picking out all the little details you'd never stare
long enough to get if she'd ever just return your gaze,
this, this is your revenge.”

“I am the punishment of God...If you had not committed great sins,
God would not have sent a punishment like me upon you.”

“Justice belongs to those who claim it, but let the claimant
beware lest he create new injustice by his claim and thus set
the bloody pendulum of revenge into its inexorable motion”

Bridge
Such a waist of time
such a helpless mind
Such a waist of time
Such a waist of my entire..

Chorus
Tear me open
pull out, the
Life un-broken

Tear me open
pull out, the
Life unbroken

Ending
Tear me open (pull out)
Tear me open (the life in me)
Tear me open (pull out all of the strings you tied to me)
Tear me open x2
Tear me open (all the strings you tied to me)

Tear me open <- repeat untill fade out
#2
Well, I was wondering what the title could mean, then I read your song.

The use of the word "Tear" is a bit annoying and typical in alternative rock music/shit you hear on teh radio.

The chorus' and bridge's don't change, which I find to be a lack of creativity, or laziness.

The verses were fine. The quotes are fine as well, but I think can be left out. If it's time for an instrumental, I think some singing can be left out.

Just trying to help c4c my work in my sig?

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#3
“I am the punishment of God...If you had not committed great sins,
God would not have sent a punishment like me upon you.”


Good movie, Blood and Bone..i thought it was a great line myself also LOL...oh thats right..i know stuff!

i dont think tear is a bad word..but you do use it..quite a bit...but i guess its ok i didnt really see nothing that bad..keep it up