#1
You dont know how many times I've helplessly watched you cry...

Tears falling from your face echoing the sobs in your voice...

I stand silent...

Watching...

Afraid to say anything because i know that when your upset, all you want to be is left alone...

But still a knot twists and turns inside me as i watch your tears tumble toward the floor...

But i still stand silently watching...

Watching others ask you what is wrong...

Watching you smile at them assuring them not to worry...

I wonder if there is anything at all i could do...

Anything...

What could I do?

I still want to try...

I ask...

"Would you like to talk about it sometime?"...

but it doesnt come out that way...

I am cut off before i say the last word...

and I am told to leave...

told that I am pushy...

I back away with raised, surrendering hands

And so I now stand right here...

Helpless...

Watching you cry...
#2
That's very emotional. Congrats on making a wonderful piece.
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#3
As I said on facebook, this is beautiful. Anyone can write a poem, but only someone with a heart can write poetry, and Im pretty sure you accomplished that.
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Well, I think I'll go turn myself off an' go on down
All the way down...
Really ain't no use in me hanging around
You know what I'm trying to say
Music, sweet music
I wish I could caress, and-a kiss
Manic Depression is a fustrating mess
#4
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"Would you like to talk about it sometime?"...

but it doesnt come out that way...

I am cut off before i say the last word...

Watching you cry...


I read the title and i though, "this is gonna be another cliché". But man, you blew my mind. I absolutely love the three lines ive quoted, they're perfect.

This is absolutely beautiful, very good job.
#5
Wow man, you're really on to something there. It kept me entranced as I read, i'm quite impressed.

Keep it up!
#6
You have picked a really nice theme I really like it especially from here onwards...
"Would you like to talk about it sometime?"

(although I dont like the use of the word pushy but I think that's just a personal dislike for that word:p)

Portrays really well just how much it hurts to see a person you love and care for, cry and how unsetteled it makes you feel to not be able to do anything.You got all this across without using the exact words,your imagery is goodKeep it up!
Last edited by BloodCold at Oct 1, 2010,