#1
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KAMIKAZE MISSION

I pray that this transmission
Cuts through and opens you up
Until your heart is exposed
And you spill all of your guts
God damn pick up the radio
You don't need more beauty sleep
Should I go in for the kill
Or should I back off and retreat

I hate to admit it
But right now I need you
To help find a smile
Beneath these battle wounds
I'm not usually like this
But it's been so long
Since I've had a good reason
To write a happy song

I finally found something
Truly worth dying for
The kind of face and mind
That make the peaceful go to war
And when a rain of fire
Makes tranquility passe
No I will not worry
There's an angel in my airspace

I hate to admit it
But right now I need you
To help find a smile
Beneath these battle wounds
I'm not usually like this
But it's been so long
Since I've had a good reason
To write a happy song

Am I flying high
Straight into the heavens
Or will I crash and burn
Just a kamikaze mission

This is your love song
This is my letter back home
Lone wolf to red fox
Please pick up the phone

Pick it up, give it up
Write it down, rip it up
These are the days
When cheap talk costs too much
Last edited by themarsvolta at Nov 23, 2010,
#2
This is definitely cool subject matter. I like the verses, they seem alright to me. But the chorus in my eyes should be a little longer. Maybe just another stanza that does kind of tie the whole song together. I understood what the song was going for, but it took some though. If another stanza was added to the chorus that helped tie things together, I feel this would be a solid tune. Cheers bro

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#3
DUDE...
This is amazing. I love it, I was especially sold at the third paragraph. Love songs are the best like this, I believe and you really delivered.
Excellent =]
#5
like rockyn bull said great verses but the chorus just seems a bit off to me, i think a bit more imagery in there and you'd be onto something special
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