#1
If tomorrow the light dims
I'll hold you in the dark
We can watch the world explode
Dance on the grave of past lives
Set fire to the books of love
We can right our own
Let the ashes cover the ground
For all that's lost
It's your dreams I've found
#2
At first I was really turned off by how generic this sounded. Though after finishing it I began to like it. It's sincere, and genuine. It's not full of pretentious metaphors and really artsy farsty stops and puncuations. It does what writing is supposed to do:

Convey emotion.

I like it, and I hope whoever you wrote it for does too.
OBEY THE MIGHTY SHITKICKER