Christopher S
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Join date: Oct 2010
880 IQ
#1
So, yeah!

I'm working on a tune, not really sure where it's going this far, at least not entirely.
Though, I've got some ideas for the rest.

Feel free to contribute with ideas, and shout out if anything sounds horrendous.

Cheers!
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Meldoisk.gp5
patrickaumon
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Join date: Jul 2009
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#2
Alright , thanks at first for the awesome comment you left me!

For your song I suggest that you put for the rythm a more complex patern of stroking the notes.

The lead from bar 13 to 20 is AWESOME!.
39 to the end is also a very potential riff. It can be so many thing at once!

You should also work on the drums. It could totally change a single pattern of eight note to something very interesting.
Christopher S
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Join date: Oct 2010
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#3
No probs mate!

I've been thinking the very same thing, though, I haven't been able to come up with anything yet. The whole idea for the song was to make it dynamical, to have the verse down-low, and the choruses and/or other parts being really energetic. But, you are correct; a more complex pattern would kill the song.

Thanks! I'm really happy with 13-20, good to hear it's not only me!
39 and out is really catchy, with potential. If you have any ideas, shout'em out. I've got some ideas, but unfortunately my guitar isn't "with me" atm.

Let's just say drums aren't my strong side. Not really a drummer, and I can barely pump out a basic 4/4 beat IRL. Trying my best!
Christopher S
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Join date: Oct 2010
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#5
I've fixed the verse, which obviously was a tad bit too repetetive.
I think it's a lot better know.

Tell me what you think!
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Mean Mr Mustard
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Join date: Aug 2007
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#6
Going off the new version:
- I think the intro is good although, itd probably sound better if you let the notes ring out. The Lead part with the octaves was great. And I turned the drums and bass up a bit, they were too low in the mix (at least in the MIDI)
- I think that from 13-20, for the power chords, you should add the octave in to make it sound fuller (5-5-5- - -)
- I gave the Verse (?) a "let ring" and though it sounded a little better
- The chorus was good, all you need to do is finish it

As of now, I give it a 8-9/10


Edit: itd be awesome if you could check out my song: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1367923
Last edited by Mean Mr Mustard at Oct 4, 2010,
Christopher S
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Join date: Oct 2010
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#7
Just did the changes you suggested, and it sounded ALOT better. Thanks man!

I'll update it as soon as I've gotten further.
guitar ben94
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Join date: Mar 2009
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#9
Agree with everyone else. This is very good. As said before, the lead at 13-20 is fantastic. Sounds sweet.
The whole thing just sounds great. I love the chorus at the minute. Just keep going and it'll be a very good song indeed. Good stuff.