Tbh, I'm not really sure if it's metalcore or not, but it has plenty o' breakdowns/beatdowns/chugs so what the hey.

Quite a lot of BTBAM influence, which probably shows.

I'm incredibly proud of the "chorus" I think I've finally managed to write something relatively "catchy" for once, without it being too generic. But I'll let you make your minds up on that one

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-I like the bars 1-14 it gives it an awsome eerie feel
-17-20 are plaing but when the lead kicks in it is better
-i like the breakdown at 26-31, but perhaps use a different cymbal than the splash to add more definition
-44-49 i can definitly tell the btbam influence here and i like this part alot
-the breakdown is okay just plain
-bars 62-77 i really like how the lead takes control of the piece
- the riff afterwards is just very plain, not great but not bad
-the breakdown at 93 is really good, a nice headbanger
-98-101 sound like signature btbam chaoctiness and is good
-The outro sounds pretty good too

Overall 7.5/10 it was good but some parts seem to be lacking a little bit

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The switch to acoustic at the end seemed a bit pointless and sort of killed the flow. But the time sig chaos from before was really really cool.
This song is pretty cool, pretty weird, but I like it. It's the kind of music that kids with short attention spans will want to listen to. I think you might have some trouble sticking to a specific key signatures; they're all over the place. That might be a good thing or bad thing. But the beginning just sounds awkward to me. There's also a lot of dissonance in here which might get annoying after a while. And I also agree about the splash cymbals in the breakdown. Some china in there would make the impact so much greater.

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