PLUCK
Robb Flynn
Join date: Feb 2006
148 IQ
#2
Wow this was actually way better than I expected! Sounds kind of August burns red:ish to me or something ( that is a good thing!). great melody, it really sticks out at the same time as its being catchy. Fresh sound. I was thinking maybe you could squeeze in another chord like before the riff starts over again, maybe the second time or something. Tried a couple but nah it sounded better off without those I tried. If you want to maybe you could mess around with that but hey thats just my opinion. The clock is 03:45 in the morning so I'm not really capable of saying much more than that this riff / chorus has some real potential of being a strong part of a great song! I really hope you make somthing out of this - If you do - please let me know Do you have a band?

// Leon
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ibz120
Waggoner Freak
Join date: Jul 2009
762 IQ
#3
Hey, thanks a lot! I'll try maybe turning the ending chord into a V7 chord, and adding another or something like that. I don't have a band, but I would love to play in one haha. I'll let you know once I get the rest of the song finished
PLUCK
Robb Flynn
Join date: Feb 2006
148 IQ
#5
Yeah I was thinking a V7 but none of the inversions i tried sounded good and the more i think about it - you don't need to change anything! Really awesome riff and as jh1193 I also wish I hade come up with that! Impressive!

Btw, would be sweet to hear what you think about a potential song i wrote a while ago.. https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=25473690#post25473690
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Last edited by PLUCK at Oct 12, 2010,
ibz120
Waggoner Freak
Join date: Jul 2009
762 IQ
#6
Yeah I tried adding another chord, but it really didn't sound as good as it already does :p. I left critique on your video .