deilyte172
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Join date: Feb 2011
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#1
Hey guys, I wrote a prog rock/metal song, and I just need your opinion on my music(I'm writing for my band actually...). It's titled "The Dark Side". I'm inspired mostly by Dream Theater, so there's a lot of DT stuff there. I kinda copied "A Change of Seasons" by DT, so it's divided into sections, there's a total of 5 sections in this song. OK, so I just need your comments, opinions, or maybe suggestions to make the song better. There aren't any vocals yet, just the music, but I'm writing the lyrics for it now...

So, here's the first two section of the song...
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Chapter 1 Eternal Sorrow.gp5
Chapter 2 Birth of the Beast.gp5
Pete-V
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Join date: May 2009
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#2
Nice dude The first was really beautiful and the second had really the feeling progresive metal shall have (; keep it comming
MagicsDevil
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Critiquing chapter 3 as I listen...

-Intro is pretty good, using the beefy E5 there.
-I'm not an expert on synth lines, but the arpeggios in this are strong. Although it is a bit cheesy.
-Nice occasional crash hits, and thanks for using 36 for the kick and not 35, lol.
-Ensemble in the back sounds good behind the arpeggios, of course.

-good use of triplet 4ths
-When the gallops come in it starts to remind me of The Final Countdown lol >.<
still pretty sweet though

Bar 25: transition is alright, change tempo part is pretty good, but I feel like you could have ventured a little further out of the lower range, but maybe thats just me.

51: Alright transition again, this time a bit more complex, although it still seems to be lacking a bit of depth, which I think could be fixed by changing the drums to be a bit less raw, or even adding some soft synth. Otherwise good.

59: Other instruments come in, very good.

Solo section: I like the 16th note kick coming in there, your choice of cymbals, etc are a bit lacking, but I get the idea.

-The whole-note powerchord thing worked a bit before, but I would keep the chords and mix it up a bit if I were you.

C4C at https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1396015

I would suggest criting Synder or Beam, maybe Mathy.
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MagicsDevil
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Quote by deilyte172
Thank's for the crit, I'm still learning music theory anyway... (And I'm still 14, too )


Hey nice man, cool to see a fellow 14 year old writing some stuff
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