Mean Mr Mustard
Naked By The Computer
Join date: Aug 2007
6,883 IQ
Nice intro. For that first bar, it sounds better to me if you let the notes ring out like you do later. However, its only the open string dont move into anything else. It'd sound better if you had the four measures off the open string note and then had the next 4 measures off another powerchord, like 5th fret or 8th or something. Then just take this chord progression and use it for the bar 10 riff. Too many opens. The extra guitar sounds nice though.

Bar 35 sounds pretty good as a chorus, leaving me to think that bar 27 could be a good verse. I think that you could continue this by going into a second verse thats different from that first verse, maybe a slower one or a more melodic one to contrast with the faster one at bar 27, and then lead into another chorus.