Dresse
Registered User
Join date: Jul 2009
43 IQ
#1
Hello

I have written the first parts of a song and now i've come to a part where I want a breakdown. I have thought about it alot but I can't seem to get the sound I want. Maybe you guys have some ideas or suggestions for that part?
In addition, any comments on the parts i've written so far are most welcome

Thanks for reading and listening!

..Update..

So the song has progressed somewhat, now its coming to the end and i'm stuck again.
Any help on how to further progress this song is most welcome. Also any constructive / deconstructive criticism on the piece is MOST welcome.

Thanks in advance !

..Update..

Finished song. Thanks for efforts !
Last edited by Dresse at May 12, 2011,
envoykrawkwar7
Better nate then lever
Join date: Jul 2007
1,007 IQ
#2
im going to attach a file for you to look at too help you with your breakdown, but for the rest of your song, your going to need to speed it up if you want it to be metalcore, as its drastically way to slow =\
Attachments:
breakdown help.gp5
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Dresse
Registered User
Join date: Jul 2009
43 IQ
#3
Thank you for your reply! I am not too experienced in song writing so I have still much too learn
envoykrawkwar7
Better nate then lever
Join date: Jul 2007
1,007 IQ
#4
ah well on these forums never be scared to ask thers lots of helpful people, although your in a genre lots will hate on too, but theres a few out there like me who love this style that will gladly always lend a hand. feel free to let me know if you need more help writing this
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You know when Attack Attack is ripping off your music, you're onto something


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frankibo
UG Board King
Join date: May 2007
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#5
Quote by Dresse
Generic Metalcore / post hardcore


Fixed.
My songs are all located here .
Feel free to drop by and crit a song.
Leave a link and I'll return a crit



Colossus
Last edited by frankibo at Feb 28, 2011,
Dresse
Registered User
Join date: Jul 2009
43 IQ
#6
Update provided for this song, any new critique is most welcome