Erra93
erriuyai
Join date: Nov 2009
1,682 IQ
#2
I'm very tired, but one thing I noticed was your harmonies, for example

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E S S S S S S S S E E E
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----------7h-8-------8h-10-8p--7-----||
-----7h-8------8h-10--------------8--||
--0----------------------------------||

When harmonizing that, I would use 10 for 7, 12 for 8, 15 for 10
Like this:

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E S S S S S S S S E E E
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----------10h-12-------12h-15-12p--10-----||
-----10h-12------12h-15--------------12--||
--0----------------------------------||


Try it out and see if you like it
MattAnderson111
Registered User
Join date: Dec 2007
4,055 IQ
#4
The chord progression in the intro was real good, complimented that riff well.

I really liked those breakdowns, I didn't find them too generic, keep that up.

The chorus+post chorus, made a great pair.

The key change was weird at the bridge, but that might just be me. It works, not one of my favorite parts, but, it works.

The second bridge is amazing when the harmony comes in, my god, that was beautiful.

The only odd thing I observed was you harmonized the 8, on the G string, with a 14. It's a 13 on that particular string.

Overall, it was above average, and I enjoyed the breakdowns, everyone has their own opinion.
Poop.


Yes, poop.