#1
I wrote this shortly before this. I was going for something that was vague, perhaps for the sake of being vague, but also because being vague allows me to write about something with the thought that people may not be able to guess what it's about.

I am interested to see who thinks they know what I'm talking about. It's a bit of a layered piece so look carefully.

C4C

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What went awry when I looked into your eye?
And what was that noise, coming from the drunk killjoys?
What did you lose coming from anew?
Come sit beside and tell me to abide.

Bid them well and goodbye with tender hearts and sleeve-held grudges
Find one more excuse and put it on your forehead for good use
What did you lose coming from anew?
Come sit beside and tell me who do I abide.

Now here we are on open field
gravel rocks underneath our shoe
cameras we hold instead of guns
with a fence behind our back
we could be revolutionaries but we're stationary
because we choose to capture and not to shoot

Bid them well and goodbye with tender kiss and heartfelt grudges
And what went awry when I gazed into your eyes?
What did you lose coming from anew?
Come sit beside and tell me to who do I die.
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GEAR
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#2
I'm also considering doing a lofi acoustic recording of it.
GEAR
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Marshall 1987 JCM-800 2210 100W

Proud Member of:
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Marshall Amplification
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#3
i enjoyed this. the second stanza especially. though i did find the last line a bit awkward, it was still a very good piece.
#4
No bumping lol

As to interpreting what you meant, I kinda got a whole "questioning someone's religion" vibe.

More so with the
Find one more excuse and put it on your forehead for good use
line reminding me of Ash Wednesday. That kind of triggered it, and then the repeated line
What did you lose coming from anew?
Coming anew can be viewed as like becoming a new person through Christ, so you're sort of asking them what did they lose by making this choice.
Come sit beside and tell me to who do I die.
This also seemed to be saying, alright tell me where we go, or to what God we go to, in death. So yeah, I took it as question religion-ish.

As far as the poem itself, I thought it was decent. The first and last stanzas came across a bit awkwardly, but the third stanza was quite nice. It had great imagery and I love
cameras we hold instead of guns
with a fence behind our back
we could be revolutionaries but we're stationary
because we choose to capture and not to shoot


That was badass.