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Now, I know it's nothing amazing..I just thought i'd post up something random; see what kind of track i'm one. Also, i'm unsure of any originality in the theme, obviously it's not completely original as it's a comparison of love and pain, but the lyrical concept is what i'm mostly concerned about.

I told her,
I long for her,
Night and day,
I feel ill,
rich with dismay,
Confessed,
"It's bottomless,
Worse than a blade",

I'm deep in dread,
And I need to confide,
She said,
"Baby, that is love,"
"Dearest,
It sounds like suicide",

"It's better than words,"
She lies so beautiful,
"But it's killing me now,"
Down to the cuticle,
"Don't you see we're endowed,
Quit being juvenile",

I'm restless and worried,
My needs collide,
She said,
"Baby, that is love,"
"Dearest,
It sounds like suicide",

Pulling the wool over my mind,
Mannerly and suitable,
"I love you, you love me,"
"It's undisputeable",
Maybe we're both caught in the trap
And it's uneludible,

I can't help but believe it,
Coming from her mind,
I just can't concieve it,
No logic I can find,
She said,
"Baby, that is love",
"Dearest,
It sounds like suicide",

Just perhaps you're blind too,
unknowing what's to ensue,
What this wicked gift will do,
Maybe we're both better off dead,
We're crazy,
Me and you,

I'm deep in dread,
And I need to confide,
I'm restless and worried,
My needs collide,
"Baby, that's love",
"Dearest,
It sounds like suicide",
"If that is love,
It sounds like suicide",


I also thought of jokingly doing the end line one more time but saying

That ain't love,
Darlin',
It's 20 to life.