#1
Moments
In time
show me
Where I should go

Moments
In time
Hold me
And don't let go

Come on closer now
Come on closer now
There's nothing to fear

Come on closer now
Come on closer now
And listen to me dear

I've got nothing to say
So just read my lips
Ill be walking away (walking away)
X4

Ill keep it all inside

Choices
I make
Come back
To try and haunt me

Choices
I make
Come back
To try and bite me

Come on closer now
Come on closer now
There's nothing to fear

Come on closer now
Come on closer now
And listen to me dear

I've got nothing to say
So just read my lips
Ill be walking away (walking away)
X4

Ill keep it all inside to forget
All the places where I've been
I can't throw them away
Forever they will stay
But I have to deal with them some way

I look into your eyes
And see them shining blue
I regret what I have done to you
I hope that you can say
You'll forgive me someday
Yet still I walk away

Come on closer now
Come on closer now
There's nothing to fear

Come on closer now
Come on closer now
And listen to me dear

I've got nothing to say
So just read my lips
Ill be walking away (walking away)
X4
There is a saying in poetry, "show me, don't tell me." here you are announcing everything, like an announcer to a sporting event. "Dave has the ball. Dave passes the ball. Dave picks his ass."

~Zanascross

XD epic win
#2
Wow, I really liked how you described it, I could really imagine you talking to someone you hurt and you want her to forgive you but you still are walking away, but I think you could have said the walking away part less times.

Great song.
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#3
^ thank you lol I'm glad that you can actually see a story there. When I started it it felt like I was kinda putter random stuff but it all worked out. And ya, I guess I could use walking away alittle less, but its kinda the hook and the way I have it in my head it works, but thank you for the positive feed back =D
There is a saying in poetry, "show me, don't tell me." here you are announcing everything, like an announcer to a sporting event. "Dave has the ball. Dave passes the ball. Dave picks his ass."

~Zanascross

XD epic win