Join date: Mar 2011
30 IQ
The first song I ever wrote on GP5. It's not finished, it needs better drum fills and the solo needs work, so any help here would be appreciated.

Somebody re-doing bars 23-25 would be nice

C4C of course.
Song #1.gp5
Last edited by tom1995w at Mar 18, 2011,
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Join date: Dec 2009
10 IQ
First of all, nice solo.

Now, you've got a good progression to build upon, but there's nothing to really crit yet?

The drums were decent, the progression is decent(could use more fills though), the solo is quite good etc..
But atm it's just some powerchords and a solo, not a song. Try making it more original (add other instruments, add some riffs/melodies, add some more parts..).

Sorry if that sounded rude, I'm not saying it's bad, you just need to make it into a song. Imo, ofcourse.
Join date: Oct 2007
711 IQ
Needs to be fleshed out more obviously, but it's a start.

Also, you might want to think about moving the accent on the drums from the third beat. It gets masked behind the second set of power chords every measure and loses it's strength.

All I have to say for now, it's just not a full song yet really.