#1
Hi everyone.

First of all I will say that I have been a member of this site for ages (ever since ol' 'Taborama' went down and I thought tab sites were all but lost), and I often visit this forum to have a little listen to the Original Recordings posted up, as I am always on the lookout for some new tunes, and find it more interesting to peruse the eclectic blend of styles and genres used in all this material.

I have recently decided, however, to try my old hand at this songwriting thing, as I have 1,000,001 riffs written, and have finally (after acquiring a basic portable multi-track) recorded a [very] basic demo of a song I wrote years ago and never seemed to forget.

Now I know the mix isn't perfect, and I played all instruments on the first go round with no editing, so I know it is littered with mistakes and bum notes all over the place, but I was interested to see what you guys made of it. I am struggling mainly with an outro and some sort of melody line for lyrics (of which I still haven't written) so any help particularly in these areas would be greatly appreciated.

Lastly, I know the tune itself may be slightly 'radio-friendly' or 'poppy' but please try and bare with it. Any criticism levvied at me for this I am happy to accept.

So please pull no punches, and let me know what you think, so long as it is backed up by evidence. 'It's s**t' as a statement on it's own, although factually accurate, doesn't really help me.

Demo

Cheers.

PS: Sorry for the strangely formal and sincere 'letter' to introduce myself.
#2
It took me ages to find out what it sounded like, but I've found the track. To me the guitar bares a lot of resemblance to The Foo Fighter's Everlong... But that's besides the point.

I liked the bass and guitarplaying, but the transitions seemed a little off, and the drums were a bit awkward at times. And yeah, that ending :p. This, with a good vocal line + lyrics could result in a pretty decent song though!
Tell me who's that writin'...
Last edited by Kylianvb at Mar 24, 2011,