#1
So I've had writers block for a long time. That's why you haven't seen me around S&L! Mostly because the criticism here has made it harder to write. I feel like I can't write good enough (Only because of a few UG'ers. )


Anyways, this is a very rough draft. No revisions really, as I don't know how to revise it very well.
Suggestions, crits, and everything is welcome!

From all the times
I've been in thought
I've come to wonder
where it all began

where the energy
had been conceived
where the matter
had been formed

Creation,
my biggest mystery
Creation,
I don't know it's history
Creation,
unsolvable puzzle
Everything I consider
seems to fall and crumble

My mind cannot grasp
what had created it,
will I ever know
the answer?

All my life it remains,
as a mystery,
unattainable through our knowledge
perhaps one day,
an opportunity shall arise
where I can grasp the knowing
from the start.

Creation,
my biggest mystery
Creation,
I don't know it's history
Creation,
unsolvable puzzle
Everything I consider
seems to fall and crumble

The force that holds it all together,
I question it's possibility
and the laws it holds,
it's reason unknown

Where do the answers lie?

Creation,
my biggest mystery
Creation,
I don't know it's history
Creation,
unsolvable puzzle
Everything I consider
seems to fall and crumble

why is it how it is?

SKEDIT: I re-wrote the chorus. Made it catchier, and also a bit more of what I feel.
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Last edited by skylerjames13 at Mar 25, 2011,
#2
I honestly think this would read better as prose.

It's really....inquisitive. I don't feel it's a poem so much as a string of questions
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I honestly think this would read better as prose.

It's really....inquisitive. I don't feel it's a poem so much as a string of questions


I tried to make it as 'simple' as I could.
I intended on making a song about how the universe came to be pretty much. Such as Energy, protons, neutrons, matter, etc.
I do kinda see how it is a huge string of questions.. I think I will try and fix that.

Have you found Jesus yet?

I don't see how Jesus has anything to do with it. I don't think he was the son of god.
Quote by DonGlover

You look like a young Eugene Levy, but with a moustache.

Quote by slapsymcdougal
Quote by Dreadnought
Kicking a man when he's down, I'm proud of you

When they're down is the safest time.

Soundcloud
Sharks Stanley Cup 15-16
Sharks Stanley Cup 16-17,,,,?
#5
Okay so I fixed it up a bit. More suggestions are welcome.
Quote by DonGlover

You look like a young Eugene Levy, but with a moustache.

Quote by slapsymcdougal
Quote by Dreadnought
Kicking a man when he's down, I'm proud of you

When they're down is the safest time.

Soundcloud
Sharks Stanley Cup 15-16
Sharks Stanley Cup 16-17,,,,?