Well Ive been listening to a lot of bands but Within the Ruins pops out pretty nicely now. I wrote this kinda with them in mind. The other guitarist helped out a little. I'm thinking of ways to organize them to flow a little better. It's kinda obvious which riffs stand out and which don't. Tell me which ones you guys like and what others you don't.

Last edited by kylendm at May 7, 2011,
Could I get at least one critique :/
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Intro : Meh, I didn't really like it. It wasn't bad by any means, just not really my style.

A: Cool section. The quarter note into the half note bends (if that makes sense) were well placed. I often feel that quarter note bends are used wrong, but you placed them well.

B: Awesome lead, very "disjointed", which gave it a super techy feel.

C: Very nice riff, really groovy. My favorite riff of the bunch.

D: Nice sweeps, could be a cool interlude.

Intro riff again.

Last riff : Quite liked the rhythm. I assume this was meant as the beginning of a solo. If so I would definetily continue with it.
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Intro: I'm not sure on the first few bars, but I quite like the ascending bit on bars 4-6. The rest of it... as the other guy said, yeah, not really my thing.

A: I'm not sure on section A either to be honest. I very much dislike all the bends, but I do like how it breaks on bar 16, works very well! I like the way the double bass works here as well.

B: As the guy before me said, yes, awesome broken up lead. I love the really basic rhythm here as well. The crashes towards the end also work, good job here.

C: Technical. I find it very nice. I love the really low sound of the seven string here.

D: I hate the little solo, which is a shame because the rhythm here is good. I found it much better with that solo muted out. Not a fan of the second half I like it alot after bar 62 though - those dark notes worked very well and I think what you've done with the fading lead is rather unique.

Crit mine?

Overall pretty cool song

intro was awesome, i liked how the rhythm changes and the harmoniezz

A: this was nice riff and it really fit into the song

B: didn't really like this part mostly because of the lead, i would change it so the lead guitar plays little different rhythm and (i know it guitar pro but still) put some reverb to it

C: this part shines with the seven string guitar I like it. It has that fast-paced feel for a lack of better words

D: solo sounds neat but it isn't that original im afraid. transition back to intro riff works

The outro could go on for a little further, it's one the best parts of the song imo.
I thought the lead had somekind of egyptian feel to it really nice.

Drums were kind of blank throughout the whole song, i would work on them, maybe throw some bigger drum fills here and there