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Hello,

I'm Joni operating under the alias of J'ai Rien - I'd love some feedback on my lyrics for my song Barcelona


you've got a choice
the words were spoken
the tone of voice
left me half broken
i'll call you every night

these footsteps fade
as each grass blade
sways and blows
crushed under your toes
then the feeling goes

a hint of laughter when she cries
or something i cant analyse



If you want to hear them as a final product, you can listen here http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XFxoSkziBIY

Thanks very much!