#1
A daydream in this playground,
Bright colors; Weird sounds.
But look, look at what I found!
A weird noun; A happy frown.

But then it all dissolves into sand,
Lost all control; Can't understand.
And then in a blue bright hazy land,
A dark evil magician waves his wand.

But nothings happens, absolutely nothing,
And suddenly, some lady starts to sing,
High weird notes; The world revolves.
I live, you live, I die, no one cries.

And time stops, without any meaning at all,
And through this wormhole, I still fall,
No one knows where I am going,
Like a drop in a river fast flowing
#2
Every stanza feels separate, you rhyme 1,2,1,2 in the first, 1,1,2,3 in the second and third and then 1,1,2,2 in the fourth. Really, each individual stanza is structured well though.
But... I don't know, what does it mean? Honestly, the overall message I received was "I wrote some rhyming words". The first two lines set this up to be a nostalgic dive into the innocence of childhood, instead I felt it was a little muddled, confused :/

I'm only a novice at this, maybe I'm missing something important that the more seasoned S&L users will see. Don't let this stop you if they don't, learn from it and evolve into a better writer.
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#4
Multiples are against the rules. I would advise you not to make it so obvious if you want to get away with it.
Music is an art form that celebrates potential. So long as you're looking for it, you'll always find it.