#1
It's Been about two years since I've written anything. I just wrote this two minutes ago. Any Critique is welcomed, I'm a bit rusty.


Traveling by Night
drags at my heels.
every step is a
fight to keep
trudging or to sleep
to concede to my
aches and complaints,
to try again tomorrow.

Traveling by night
cuts my mind in two.
Every thought is a
fight to keep
my sanity
or to indulge my self
in fantasy
to focus on my
footsteps

Traveling by night is a drag...
Last edited by Krispy_chicken at Apr 6, 2011,
#3
I really like this. I like the structure to it, and to be honest, its refreshing to see something written about what i feel is a rather unique topic. I dont know if it was intended, but the poem almost has a lonely feel to it. Great work!