#1
So I'm sending a letter to apply for some online high school courses and i dont want to sound like an idiot In my letters and I cant figure out If this sentence is proper or not

Thanks for the reply Mary. If math 11 is unavailable until fall would it be possible to sign up for physics 11?

Probably the worst place ever to ask but... anyone?
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#2
Part of me thinks there needs to be a comma after fall
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#5
Yaaa i wish i actually took high school more seriously so I wouldnt have to do all this shit twice.
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Part of me thinks there needs to be a comma after fall

I'd put it there too, but I don't think it would make a huge difference.
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So I'm sending a letter to apply for some online high school courses and i dont want to sound like an idiot In my letters and I cant figure out If this sentence is proper or not

Thanks for the reply Mary. If math 11 is unavailable until fall would it be possible to sign up for physics 11?

Probably the worst place ever to ask but... anyone?

Reword it. "Thanks for the reply Mary, would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11 if Math 11 is unavailable until fall?"

Capitalize Math and Physics because they are specific courses.
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#9
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Reword it. "Thanks for the reply Mary, would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11 if Math 11 is unavailable until fall?"

Capitalize Math and Physics because they are specific courses.

I like it better as two sentences, but I agree with the capitalization.

EDIT: And I feel like there should be a comma after "reply" if you kept it as two sentences.
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Quote by toby3p0
Reword it. "Thanks for the reply Mary, would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11 if Math 11 is unavailable until fall?"

Capitalize Math and Physics because they are specific courses.


Ya that definately looks alot better aha. thanks
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#11
The second sentence should read like toby3p0's, but you should have a comma after "reply".

"Thanks for the reply, Mary. Would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11 if Math 11 is unavailable until fall?"
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#12
Thanks a lot, Mary. I was curious, if Math 11 is unavailable until Fall, would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11?
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#13
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The second sentence should read like toby3p0's, but you should have a comma after "reply".

"Thanks for the reply, Mary. Would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11 if Math 11 is unavailable until fall?"

Good catch sir.

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So I'm sending a letter to apply for some online high school courses and i dont want to sound like an idiot In my letters and I cant figure out If this sentence is proper or not

Thanks for the reply, Mary. If math 11 is unavailable until fall, would it be possible to sign up for physics 11?

Probably the worst place ever to ask but... anyone?

That's how I see it. Technically it's punctuation you need.

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#15
Thanks for the reply, Mary. If Math 11 is unavailable until fall, would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11?
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#16
Math 11 is a pretty cool guy. He is unavailable until fall, and doesn't afraid to sign up for Physics 11.
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I'm sending a letter to apply for some online high school courses. I dont want to sound like an idiot in my letters, but I can't figure out if this sentence is proper or not.

"Thanks for the reply Mary. If math 11 is unavailable until fall would it be possible to sign up for physics 11?" [sic.]

Probably the worst place ever to ask, but...anyone?[fragment]


Fixed.
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#18
Thanks for the reply, Mary. If Math 11 is unavailable until fall, would it be possible to sign up for Physics 11?


Your punctuation is terrible, TS. Also, use the month and not the season. The words "until fall" sound stupid.. "If Math 11 is unavailable until September" sounds a lot better.