#2
It worked this time Murt!
As I promised, here is your critique.

I really like the concept of the song, as a fan of progressive/experimental rock. It sounds like you guys have a good start for what you want to do. Although the song tends to get really repetitive. I would like to see another guitar with slight overdrive on kind of playing more of a lead guitar with heavy but slow slides down the neck adding something more melodic and some harmonics. Like I said, it's a real good start of something, but you got some work to do. Keep on it.