amonamarthmetal
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#1
hey doods this is slayerfrk, havnt added a song in a while. so i was listening to nick pitera's version of baby today and it inspired me to make e my own versio. i made this in just a few short hours and its about 2 minutes. please tell me what you think and how i can improve it please. it feels a bit repetative to me but what ever.

This song was made in TuxGuitar


C4C AS ALWAYS
Attachments:
Baby core version.zip
Last edited by amonamarthmetal at Apr 16, 2011,
amonamarthmetal
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#6
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I'm detecting no (fill in the blank)core whatsoever.


not even gaiycore?
XtractionProces
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#7
I know a local pop/punk band who did a cover of this song, and even that sounded more xxxx-core than this.

Pretty much the only part I liked about this was the solo, which was still just ok. I'm not gonna lie, I was expecting more from this. Definitely not core.
IGNITE THE FUCKING SKY
amonamarthmetal
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#8
if you guys wouldnt classify this as "-core" what would you call it? all i can say is that i did my best, and i like how it turned out.
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#9
Hey, I didnt think it was bad. Just definitely not core. However, it got boring because there wasnt really a change in the dynamics throughout the verse and chorus. And I didnt really like the phrasing in the solos. However, the whole intro and first verse section was pretty good. The outro was nice too. Overall, it just went on for too long, and the breakdown seemed really out of place.
amonamarthmetal
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#10
i changed the verse. it sounds very generic and stoopid. if anyone would want to pitch in to make it sound better dont hesitate.
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1.1.zip
amonamarthmetal
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#12
thanks for the constructive crit's guys....

if you dont like it, just dont say anything... or at least describe what you dont like about it other than the orginal writer...
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#15
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Why... just why.

+100000000000000000000000000000000
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Ometh
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#17
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thanks ometh.


Lol sry dude, some of your metalcore stuff is okay, but this? Seriously? There is no way this could have turned out good.
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#18
No offense or anything personal but this was pretty horrible..
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#19
Brilliant, far more interesting than the original arrangement.
Good use of different instruments, the ending was awesoem
I don''t know what the others are talking about, but this is as good as the song can be. Good job
amonamarthmetal
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#20
Quote by Ara Replica
Brilliant, far more interesting than the original arrangement.
Good use of different instruments, the ending was awesoem
I don''t know what the others are talking about, but this is as good as the song can be. Good job


im pretty sure its just due to the fact that the original artist is a phaggot... but people are to immature to look past that.
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#21
I took a listen expecting something horrible, due to the source material and the relatively negative comments. I was rather surprised, actually. It is not that bad. To call it "core" would be a stretch, though it has elements of the modern hardcore scene. It still has a pop vibe, though the atmosphere is somewhat changed. It feels like a blend of the original, some new age music, and more upbeat sounding hardcore songs ("happy hardcore" I guess?). Regardless, I kind of like it in a strange way. The only problems for me are the dynamic switches, and the repetition in the rhythm guitar. I think the verses should change, potentially to straight 8th notes. That is my only real problem with this.