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Hey man,

the ideas are realy not bad, but ...

at first ... plz tune your guitar ...

the sound of your guitar is not realy bad ... but why the hell it is mono and just on the left side?

the i dunno what (bassguitar?) that occasionaly drops in to fill in with melody is not bad ... but everything with strings is just one side ... why?

i would play at least two tracks of the ry guit (left/right) ... and play somethin like a solo or melody line to give it all a little variety ...

the drums sound not bad ... but the programming lacks a little 'nativeness'

the feeling cool ... little nirvanaish ... your playin is obviously tight for what you play and that is better than playin somethin you cannot get but do this out of time ...

the mood is cool either ... a little more variety with some melody would be great ...

all in all i would say you re realy on the right way ... your songwriting is realy cool

keep it goin

for C4C here is mine ... https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1433421

would be great to read a comment ;-)

Greatz M