#1
Winter's gone away.
Springtime never came.
Suns come, suns will go
places we can't know.

When Springtime comes,
we can go home.
When Springtime comes,
we can go home.

Lonely in the dark,
Snowing in the park.
Suns come, suns will go
We can never know

When Summer comes,
we can go home.
When Autumn comes,
we can go home.

When Winter comes,
we can go home.
When Springtime comes,
we can go home.


Song's about a man and his child in limbo.
#2
"Song's about a man and his child in limbo."

There is absolutely no indication about this in the song writing - how is the audience meant to know it's about a father and son? Try throwing in some images that the listener can grasp with and that stick in the mind. Seasons on their own are too abstract and cliched.

The rhyming and the 'hook' of the song are both uninspiring and, for me, do little to rouse interest.

As I've said, add depth to it through strong images - the father and kid are in limbo, try using references to purgatory and add a religious element etc. etc.