#1
Crit for crit please?

Shades

The shades fade to grey,
unable to decide
how to color themselves.
These shades I once knew,
knew so well,
Now replaced with emptiness.

Between hues of green and blue,
where faded blots of sepia reside,
the broken reds of my heart forever
fall unto the shade of your eyes.

The shades fall to black,
away from white,
no longer pure as they were.
For I've corrupted them,
turned them dark,
through actions, without morality.

Between hues of green and blue,
where faded blots of sepia reside,
the broken reds of my heart forever
fall unto the shade of your eyes.

A broken siren unable to warn,
Danger resides
too close, near by,
not easily divulged by a twitching eye.
Hold my heart in the shades,
so grey,
seep in,
my heart becomes stone to match the feeling.

Between hues of green and blue,
where faded blots of sepia reside,
the broken reds of my heart forever
fall unto the shade of your eyes.
#2
From the first line, I was expecting really crappy stuff, but I was pleasantly surprised. (Though I do think you could change the last line of the first stanza, there has to be a better fit than "emptiness")

I like what you were doing, really, describing the transition from each color. Maybe if you elaborated one or two more transitions it would give the piece a little more weight. The white to black was nice, but if you could apply that kind of heart to another color it would bring in another set of emotions or story to the poem that I think would really help.

The chorus stanza is very nicely done, a little emo, but no complaints here.
The siren stanza is the only one I have a problem with. Everything up to that point was done in colors, and now you're talking about a sound. Idk, I just think it could use some transition if you're going to stick with it. The following lines flow a little haphazardly, ending with a bit clumsy "my heart becomes stone to match the feeling." It just seems a bit wordy, maybe if you'd switch it up, find a different way of saying it.

My heart becomes stone to blend right in. idk work with it, but if you like it your way, then keep it as is.

Very nice.

From You or Cabezon could use a crit back. Either/or, and thank you.
#3
Thanks for the criticism man. Very much appreciated.

Btw "My heart becoms stone to blend in", I love you.