-tempest-
hi, my name is matt.
Join date: Apr 2008
751 IQ
#1
lil pop punk song i wrote, its a short piece like 1:40 seconds haha. tell me what you think?
Attachments:
pop punk.gp5
pop punk.mid
Last edited by -tempest- at Apr 26, 2011,
gabrielcev
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Join date: Apr 2011
369 IQ
#2
This is not so good. Sounds stale not really unique... Just bunch of powerchords and octaves. Sounds generic. You need to step outside the box. Dont be afraid to step outside the box and try some different stuff.
gabrielcev
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Join date: Apr 2011
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#4
Quote by herby190
I don't think I agree with Gabrielcev's viewpoint; I actually like it. However, I think the drums need to be redone.


Its ok at best... Im not saying its bad its very good... but it wont get you anywhere because theres so much better...
Erra93
erriuyai
Join date: Nov 2009
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#5
Gives me a Title Fight-vibe and it's one of my favorite bands, good job, the drums could use some work though as herby190 stated
frankibo
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#6
Quote by herby190
I don't think I agree with Gabrielcev's viewpoint; I actually like it. However, I think the drums need to be redone.


I've seen some awful drums in songs on this forum but these aren't bad at all... they're actually alright (except for the use of 44 instead of 42 in the middle section, no one can pedal hi hat that fast).

I didn't think it was really generic or boring, I actually liked it quite a lot, well done.
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herby190
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#7
Quote by frankibo
I've seen some awful drums in songs on this forum but these aren't bad at all... they're actually alright (except for the use of 44 instead of 42 in the middle section, no one can pedal hi hat that fast).

I didn't think it was really generic or boring, I actually liked it quite a lot, well done.
There's way too much of the snare being used on the 1 and 3.
frankibo
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#8
Quote by herby190
There's way too much of the snare being used on the 1 and 3.


It's upbeat pop punk, it's usually like that.
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-tempest-
hi, my name is matt.
Join date: Apr 2008
751 IQ
#9
it was my first song in this genre and im not a great drummer so whatever haha. i figured id try something new, thanks for the tips and everything else(im usually writing heavier music). hopefully the next one won't be so mehh.

EDIT: apperently this midi track likes to speed up and the end haha
Last edited by -tempest- at Apr 28, 2011,